Rachelle Oren

[krazykatboy]

I want a second chance!

Name: Rachelle Oren
Race: Demi-human (Komodo Dragon)
Facet: None
Year: First
Job: None
ID: None
Address: None
Size: Medium
Height: 6' 2”
Weight: 154 lbs
Eyes: Blood red
Hair: Silver
Planet of origin: Altearth
Age: 20
HP: 8 - MP: 8
ATK: 1 + 2 (3)
DEF: 0 + 3 (3)
MAG: 0 + 1 (1)
SOC: 1 + 0 (1)
Style: Strong/Dodge
Disadvantages:
Damage magnet – Rachelle’s intimidating appearance makes her the obvious target of attacks.
Environmental Hazard (Freezing Conditions, Cold) - Rachelle is cold-blooded. Being so, she becomes rather slow and tired in cold environments. If this environment is at freezing temperature or less, the normal 1 damage/round applies as well.
Short Tempered – Rachelle can be rather instinctive at times, making her rather prone to insults

Appearance: Rachelle is extremely thin due to her abnormally hyperactive metabolism. Her scales are black, with large patches of a dirt brown, much like her predecessor. Her clothing is tomboyish, usually wearing some variation of a t-shirt and jeans. She always has a pair of headphones on her ear flaps.

Personality: Rachelle is… well, Rachelle. She tends to keep to herself until something sparks her interest. It’s rather easy to anger her and she will lash out occasionally, however she tries to keep her anger to inanimate objects. Like her predecessor, she’s rather non-responsive to a person’s tone of voice, which has tendency to tick a few people off. She has a ravenous appetite, though she can only eat meat, leaving her snacking options limited, so she commonly eats four to five meals a day, usually consisting of steak, pork, or any carrion that happens to be lying about.
The only real things that keep her attention are music and karate; so long as she has one or the other she never seems to have any problem paying attention to other events, such as class or discussions. When she focuses on a project or train of thought, it would be easier for one to break the laws of magic than get her off track. This is a double edged sword, however, as this ‘project’ could include a mundane activity such as completing a game. This focus also has tendency to lead into perfectionism, creating a never-ending loop.

History: Rachelle’s past wasn’t really eventful, she tended to dabble in music composition software while she was alive, but she let a ton of possibilities by, got only C averages in school, and goofed off during college. The date was December 27th 3012, the great war began about two years ago, ever since then militias were formed, walls raised, and commerce strictly regulated. It wasn't all that bad, though, ever since the Information Rights act twelve years ago, the public knew nearly everything they wanted to know about the war's progress, but Rachelle was one of the few that didn't truly care about the war, in fact she didn't even care about the media in general. Normally, this wouldn't be a problem, though this was the day of a mass mobilization of human troops. Foreseen by the military's spies about a month ahead, the entire island was evacuated, combine this with the fact that she lived alone, her distrust of the media, and a resounding lack of socialization and this resulted in her being practically the only demi-human still in the city at the time of the attack. She took down a handful of them, but claws against guns... guess who wins?

Equipment: Komodo’s Bite (Melee pokey, 1-5 damage +1-5 Earth damage)
Komodo’s Claws (Melee slashy, 1-10 damage)
3 TB media player w/ ear-cup surround sound headphones
Loose short sleeved camo shirt w/ blue jeans


Seeing as I have been having difficulty with Matthew's story, I decided to make a new character. Rachelle's from the same Alt-earth, but from a different time.
If you'd like I can also post up a list of major events in this Alt-earth that are likely to be brought up by Rachelle.
Also, I would think that using Komodo’s Bite would be a talk action instead of a hand action, seeing as it truly is her bite, but that's besides the point...
Like last time questions and comments are welcomed, and encouraged.

[krazykatboy]

Bump?

[Kiana Wolf]

Bump?

Don't. Say. That. EVER. *eye twitch*

EDIT: I have horrible, horrible memories of Gaia Online. They use that term there. Hence my spasming.

[krazykatboy]

Ah, yes. Understandable. Anything you'd like to suggest or point out?

[Kiana Wolf]

Ah, yes. Understandable. Anything you'd like to suggest or point out?

I'll get to you soon. Kinda multitasking waaaaaaaaaay too much lately.

[Kiana Wolf]

The bio is sparse.

Just so you know, 'Komodo's Claws' would only be ONE weapon. In case you were confused.

[krazykatboy]

Ok, added to personality quite a bit, changed claws to slash or poke by downgrading bite and added detail on appearance via inventory.
Couldn't think of anything to add on the history, it's just one of those bland, uneventful lives... sorta like mine

[Kiana Wolf]

...That's not what I asked for. So let's deal with a few of these issues. First off, why the heck is the weapon 'slashy OR pokey'? Ya gotta pick one.

And the bio. Dear gods, the bio. Over a million die and the completely uninteresting person with no drive to accomplish anything gets saved? Oh yeah, you can bet I'm calling bullshit on that.

[Yosah]

The reason you can't have a weapon with two types is because they intend to eventually add differences to them.

While there are weapons that could be used in different ways, like swinging a shortsword would be slashy and thrusting it would be pokey, you still have to choose only one type. I suppose the reasoning is that every weapon has particular way it's supposed to be used. That, or your character has a particular way of fighting with THAt weapon. *shrug*

If I might make a suggestion, I think you should make the claws a slashing weapon. Claws are curved and not straight. Plus, animals use their claws to cut, not impale. Though, It's fine whichever way you choose.

[krazykatboy]

*breathes deeply*
Ok, finally came up with an alternative backstory, not sure if it's much better, it just sorta poured out in about 20 minutes. Like last time, please feel free to point out flaws, inconsistencies, etc. etc. I want the story to be at least somewhat believable.

[theprophetgamer]

You said it took 20 minutes to churn this out....it shows. I see little improvement over the last draft. Sorry, but...



Passport rejected.